Gerald the Writer

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>Peace, Be Still

Posted on January 30, 2011 by Jerry

I saw that you paced yourself

and that graced disclosure

of your ingrained past

rose

I wondered where your shadows

would lie pared from

your impressive

gait

I didn’t care what formed you

that hourglass figure

trickled sand in foot shaped

cairns

and I prayed for the winds

to be still

so I can trace your

steps

Photo by Iquanyin Moon, the guest photographer at One Shoot Sunday

14 thoughts on “>Peace, Be Still”

Glynn on January 30, 2011 at 2:06 pm said:

>Beautiful, Jerry. You took the photo as a kind of love poem.

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dustus on January 30, 2011 at 2:16 pm said:

>I also read it as a love poem. One with an interesting uniformity in structure yet very free and revealing emotionally. "that hourglass figuretrickled sand in foot shaped" great imagery in that line. Smooth sound overall too. Great work, Jerry.

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Brian Miller on January 30, 2011 at 2:20 pm said:

>the hourglass foot sprinkling footprints…lovely imagery man!

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Claudia on January 30, 2011 at 2:40 pm said:

>i read it as well as a love poem, but maybe to one of your children? the past, forming them in a certain way and you pray for the wind to stop, so you can trace their steps? and that speaks of a lot of lovebtw i like your new blog layout

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haikulovesongs on January 30, 2011 at 2:52 pm said:

>the imagery, the structure, the phrases ~ i love everything about this. beautiful one shoot.

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Kenia Cris on January 30, 2011 at 3:49 pm said:

>Beautifully written and structured. The imagery is so sweet. I like the first verse better than any other, though each line conveys the magic of love.Thanks for your visit and lovely comment on my blog.Take care and keep smiling. =)

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Kodjo Deynoo. on January 30, 2011 at 4:44 pm said:

>Amen to that, a truly beautiful piece

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budh.aaah on January 30, 2011 at 5:16 pm said:

>Wow Jerry! great piece.

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Barbaralives on January 30, 2011 at 6:30 pm said:

>I see your heart…

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cianphelan on January 30, 2011 at 6:47 pm said:

>There is so much more love in the past met with slow disclosure, the gradual telling, the mystery shadows met with slow-spilling light. It would not be so sweet to know all at once, and if love be true…does the shape those shrinking shadows form really matter, standing bared before us in the pale light?Beautiful creation. The structure gives it a soft, easy flow that caresses us with your vision of love…so many can see loss, the disappearance in the sand, but you see footprints leading to romantic revelations…a sweet heart and a good pen you have, my friend.

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Lynne H. on January 30, 2011 at 7:39 pm said:

>This is simply put, beautiful..Beautiful words, lines, intent..Mind if I tag along here?(Love the name of your blog too!!)

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Reflections on January 31, 2011 at 2:13 am said:

>Stunning… beautiful imagery blossoming from great form… Nice!

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Celestial Dreamz on January 31, 2011 at 3:43 am said:

>so well structured and such beautiful image ..well done.

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iquanyin on January 31, 2011 at 7:33 pm said:

>so many beautifu, powerful poems. i'm humbled by the onestop poets. this one trouched me very deeply. thank you.

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